DonLakonchinno Posted February 24, 2017 Share Posted February 24, 2017 (edited) I will cut to the chase: mistakes are described in order of their appearance, screenshots are provided and mistakes are highlighted with red underlines. Spoiler In original, there is ",", not "-", but it is okay - missing space tho isn't; "войном" should be "воином"; Missing space once again; The last part that describes Nidus abilities and powers should be revisited completly, since it is a mess of commas, wrong word endings and stuff that isn't even in the original text. Also this "и т.д." is very funny. Spoiler Watch Ergo Glast become Ergoglast... (Should say "Эрго Гласт"); And Perrin Sequence become Perrins Offerings! (Should say "Последовательность Перрина"); Also, "of the" in original text implies that Ergo Glast is from Perrins Sequence, which is not reflected in localization, so it should ultimately say "Эрго Гластом из Последовательности Перрина"; "Похитили" is plural form, Nef Anyo is a single man, so it should say "Похитил";Should say "Но все не так, как кажется на первый взгляд, Тенно". Spoiler "ОЧИСТКА ЗАРАЖЕНИЯ" and "ИГРОВОЙ РЕЖИМ" should be swapped (not highlighted); Its "Обнаружьте"; "Т.к.", while being acceptable abbreviation, looks incorrect in this case. Should just be "так как", not abbreviation; "Дезинтегрирует" is incorrect, "разрушает" fits better. Spoiler We don't really use word "кастомизации" to describe items and its also a plural that relates to single syandana, so "украшение" fits better;"Бережно" is incorrect, "с осторожностью" fits better and helps to keep the narrative of those items being corrupted by Infestation;"Повреждены" is not highlighted, but the word is wrong, should say "поражены", "искажены" or even "извращены"; Should say "Заражением" instead of "Инфицированием" (not highlighted too); Missing space after dot; Incorrect form, should say "Вторичного оружия". Edited February 24, 2017 by DonLakonchinno Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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