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I'm fine with that.

*leaves a note on the table saying "'Gone somewhere with Liz, I'll be back soon.' -Guinevere"*

Lead the way.

*helps her get onboard the saltimore*

*flies us to a small town on mars*

*after parking, takes us to what looks like a simple shack

Now, you might've thought my pies were good, but...

This is the place my recipe barely manages to mimic the recipe from.

*buys a pie from the lady at the register*

*hands her a slice*

Can we see the original rough copy then? ^-^

Al said it was okay.

She did?

Well alrighty, then.

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She did?

Well alrighty, then.

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Okay I sent it Liz, if you think it's okay feel free to send it to anyone who wants a copy. I don't have time right now, I'll be afk for about an hour I think.

 

Be back in a bit.

Seems like Alz is okay with it.

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1. *helps her get onboard the saltimore*

*flies us to a small town on mars*

*after parking, takes us to what looks like a simple shack

Now, you might've thought my pies were good, but...

This is the place my recipe barely manages to mimic the recipe from.

*hands her a slice*

2. She did?

Well alrighty, then.

1. *inspects the pie before taking a bite out of it*

Mmmmmmmmmmm-mmmmm!

2. May I see it too?

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1. *inspects the pie before taking a bite out of it*

Mmmmmmmmmmm-mmmmm!

2. May I see it too?

1. *hands her the rest*

You ought to take this home, too. Reckon belle'ld want some.

But, good as this pie is, it ain't what I brought you here for.

2. Sure.

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Seems like Alz is okay with it.

2. Okay, then.
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1. Thanks. *puts the pie in one of her pouches*

What did you bring me here for, then?

*looks at her watch*

Hold on.

*warps us to the top of the tallest mountain on mars*

*the sky goes from red to bright yellow as liz talks*

I dunno if you've picked up on this yet, but I want to be more than just friends with you. The first time i saw you ride past me, my heart skipped beats like a fiddler having a stroke, and I knew I had to have you..

(I tried to come up with the most American sounding simile I could for this, how'd I do?)

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What's that expression for?

I'm saying I liked the ending and that al just seemed so sad...

 

It means your onto it!

 

She is kinda..

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Oh ok....

 

I've got the rough outlines of what I want to do with it, I just need to flesh it out some more..

 

I think it could be good though.

 

Glad you liked it though! <3

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Oh and I'm really grateful for the edits, I think you really improved it.

Aw, thanks al.

I've got the rough outlines of what I want to do with it, I just need to flesh it out some more..

 

I think it could be good though.

 

Glad you liked it though! <3

It was a good read...

Among other things...

Hue.

And I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with the bracer, plot wise.

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@Al That was a good read.

*looks at her watch*

Hold on.

*warps us to the top of the tallest mountain on mars*

*the sky goes from red to bright yellow as liz talks*

I dunno if you've picked up on this yet, but I want to be more than just friends with you. The first time i saw you ride past me, my heart skipped beats like a fiddler having a stroke, and I knew I had to have you..

(I tried to come up with the most American sounding simile I could for this, how'd I do?)

*She was so surprised, she almost gasped. Gunslict flustered, too flustered to feel much of anything at this point*

*She was at a total loss for words*

(Not bad.)

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@Al That was a good read. *She was so surprised, she almost gasped. Gunslict flustered, too flustered to feel much of anything at this point*

*She was at total loss for words*

(Not bad.)

To put it simply, I love you, Guinevere. I know it's only been two days since we first got to know each other, but...

Is there any way you feel the same way about me?

(*bows*)

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