Before The Fall - Table Of Contents - ~Fan Fiction~

[_Rue_]

I decided to join the writing contest "your story" and found it enjoyable. I wrote 2 entries for it, but submitted the second. I posted the first already and plan to continue it.

These are in no way perfect. I found that editing is not one of my fortes and need more time to work and edit. Plus, it is always easier to edit someone else's work because your braind does not fill the gaps that might otherwise be obvious.

The links will be posted here:
1: Eden

Rewrite: (almost a remake to make it less confusing)
https://forums.warfr...e-fall-01-eden/


Old version
https://forums.warfr...c/23388-1-eden/


2: Forbidden Fruit
Rewrite:
https://forums.warfr...orbidden-fruit/

Old version
https://forums.warfr...orbidden-fruit/

3: (in the works)

Feel free to comment of the general plot and ideas here. If your have editing suggestions, feel free to post it in the chapter's own thread. I will start working on the third after a few more games. :D

I'm also going to rewrite Eden while working on Chapter 3. I'm going to shift from third person to something more personal... I couldn't make first person POV work >_>

UPDATE:
0.01
Rewrote chapter 1
used the working title "Before the Fall"

0.02
Rewrote chapter 2
Added a link to this post at the end of each chapter.

 

0.03
Replaced the name of the protagonist from Amaryllis to Lark.

Edited July 9, 2013 by _Rue_

[Labraxadores]

Eh, you're probably one of my favorite "serious" writer here. I see that you're treating Warframes as different beings, rather than simple machines. It's a good idea. I'm curious to see how it turn out.

The writing style is good, and I have no criticism about it. I would say something about the pacing and the dialogue, but eh, I'm going to wait for at least the other part to say something on the likes of that.

Edited April 6, 2013 by Labraxadores

[_Rue_]

O.O thanks!

I look forward to the feedback then.

I'm working on rewriting the first two as they were essentially rushed. I am thankful that they had that contest. Thanks to it I've rediscovered the joy of writing. I'll polish the third, then post it while i rewrite the first two.

[_Rue_]

updated. :D I'm hoping that the people visiting read. I'd also appreciate comments and feedback.

[_Rue_]

updated the notes. working on 03.

[Nantlais]

Is this thing still going?