(XBOX)RIOTx420 Posted May 4, 2015 Share Posted May 4, 2015 As far back as I can remember my nikana is oiled everyday with fresh blood , War has consumed all that I am and is now all that I know , war is all I see when I close my eyes. I listen ... This ship the louts has sent me too is cold and dark , feels like home. (Clunk..clunk..clunk) What is this ? Foot steps ? I wait , I wait for the clunking to get close , close enough to see 3 bulky grineer troops almost stumbling down the ships hull. If I could feel anything I would almost be sad for them ... And before I even finished think about what a sad feeling must be like there are body parts throwen about the hull as if a pack of wild kubrows went on a feeding frenzy. It's all to easy , I close my eyes and everything dies. Is this all that I am ? My sword and bow are my closet companions, my thoughts will only result in the death of my targets. The lotus calls me Ash, inside I know I'm death. But I know there's a reason for me being on this grineer ship ... I know these were just the first three foot soldiers... Poor fools Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
papatou15 Posted May 4, 2015 Share Posted May 4, 2015 Nice, I love it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(PSN)geraldy19 Posted May 4, 2015 Share Posted May 4, 2015 (edited) Overall good poem Edited May 4, 2015 by [DE]Danielle Rude image Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(XBOX)RIOTx420 Posted May 4, 2015 Author Share Posted May 4, 2015 (Ooc) first time I've been to this part of the forum , thought I'd try to start a mission story around Ash. please feel free to add on and see where this mission takes the silent killer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flareux Posted May 4, 2015 Share Posted May 4, 2015 Dude, that was great! You should make a mini poem collection or a novel you really discribe the feelings and thought with emotion. (from what i can see here) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BabyKurama Posted May 4, 2015 Share Posted May 4, 2015 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JJKDrake Posted May 4, 2015 Share Posted May 4, 2015 Pretty good. Its more like the start of a story than a RP in my opinion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(XBOX)RIOTx420 Posted May 4, 2015 Author Share Posted May 4, 2015 (edited) Empty room after empty room , feels like my memories. The louts had awoken me for a reason , but no matter how hard I try I can not recal anything before she called me to arms. ( frustrated !) I can not lose focus... A broken vent with sounds of voices in the distance, With out hesitation a single hikou rips through the broken fan that was blocking the way into the vent. Silence is the key , I move silently. As I reach the end of the vent I see something that excites me ... I see more victims. Four grineer troops accompanied by two heavy gunners. My eyes close and I begin to think .... It's blank and empty , there's no memory ! A spit of blood grazes my cheek as I see an arm spinning off to the side ... Again I close my eyes. I don't know how long it's been , but what seems to be a few seconds I recal a vision of opening up the throat of a solder and seeing blood spurt like a broken water valve , a blinding smoke and quick screams of pain , I couldn't tell you what body parts lay at my feet or who they belonged to , it all happens so fast I feel I can't even control my instincts. Is this all that I am ? Do I enjoy the slaughter ? If you ask me why I do this I would probably kill you before you could finish asking my why. The killing helps fill the emptyness inside. Edited May 4, 2015 by (XB1)MaDHatteR420000 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(XBOX)RIOTx420 Posted May 4, 2015 Author Share Posted May 4, 2015 (edited) (Ooc) thanx everyone:) Now you'll have to forgive me if I'm doing this wrong ... It my first time hahaa , but anyone who would like to take the next line as Ash or add anything please do , Note : looking at some others amazing stories posted I've noticed I'm a little off with starting mine , sorry about that Edited May 4, 2015 by (XB1)MaDHatteR420000 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady_Viper Posted May 4, 2015 Share Posted May 4, 2015 ...This is some good stuff. Really well written, only a few errors. But tell me, is this really an RP? A Role PLay where others can join in or is this just a thread where you post your own fan fics/ poems? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(XBOX)RIOTx420 Posted May 4, 2015 Author Share Posted May 4, 2015 Thank you lady viper , honestly I don't know what I'm doing so I thought I'd just start a random open story ( I picked Ash ) I figured I'd start a setting with him , give a little insite to his thoughts and being on a grineer ship doing an exterminate mission , I just wanted to see others take a line as Ash or add another frame to join him ... It was just a try Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(XBOX)RIOTx420 Posted May 4, 2015 Author Share Posted May 4, 2015 Can I ask why ( poem ) keeps coming up ? Does it come across as one ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JJKDrake Posted May 4, 2015 Share Posted May 4, 2015 Can I ask why ( poem ) keeps coming up ? Does it come across as one ? I think it comes across as a poem to some people from how you've written it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
(XBOX)RIOTx420 Posted May 4, 2015 Author Share Posted May 4, 2015 Good to know , I'm just having a slow day at work so I'm playing with my phone lol , Seen the RP part of the forum and thought I'd try it out is all , and thank you for all the feed back , I always appreciate everything from the warframe community:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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