Trumna Description is a bit clunky and disordered

[Grav_Starstrider]

In my personal opinion, the Trumna's description is a bit out of order. It currently delivers Lore, then primary mechanics, then description of the primary fire, then secondary fire mechanics, all in different lines.

Current text:

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An ancient weapon designed by the Entrati. Primary fire siphons life essence from the target to fuel a devastating alt fire. A heavy, oversized automatic rifle with withering fire that delivers rapid heat damage. Alt fire unleashes an arcing projectile that ricochets off surfaces and enemies, exploding every impact.

I'd personally suggest the following:

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An ancient weapon designed by the Entrati. A heavy, oversized automatic rifle with withering fire that delivers rapid heat damage while siphoning life essence from the target to fuel a devastating alt fire. Secondary fire unleashes an arcing projectile that ricochets off surfaces and enemies, exploding every impact.

This would improve the flow and readability by making the line following "alt fire" be the actual alt-fire description, while bundling the descriptions of the primary fire together.

[gamingchair1121]

thats because when you use primary fire you are holding a heavy, oversized automatic rifle with withering fire that delivers rapid heat damage and while using secondary fire you are holding an arcing projectile that ricochets off surfaces and enemies that explodes every impact

[Grav_Starstrider]

On 2022-07-09 at 11:04 PM, gamingchair1121 said:

when you use primary fire you are holding a heavy, oversized automatic rifle

On 2022-07-09 at 11:04 PM, gamingchair1121 said:

and while using secondary fire you are holding an arcing projectile

You can't hold a projectile that's already being fired, and you are in fact holding the same gun no matter whether you're using the primary or alternate firing mode :V

It makes way more sense to 1) Deliver the Lore, 2) Deliver the baseline description of the weapon, 3) elaborate on the primary fire, whose final line segues into 4) the secondary fire.

[gamingchair1121]

9 minutes ago, Grav_Starstrider said:

You can't hold a projectile that's already being fired

it was a joke

[Grav_Starstrider]

7 minutes ago, gamingchair1121 said:

it was a joke

/whoosh I guess 😩 👍