Divinity112 Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 "Nanomachines son." Kevin had been devastated at the news that his Warframe was in terrible condition. Levi assured him that repairs were already under way and it should be good as new in three to five days time. In the meantime Emm had told him to focus more on resting and recovering, broken ribs were not something to laugh at. "What?" Kevin asked Levi who smirked. "You heard me, Nanomachines. Without them I bet none of us Tenno would be able to do anything, let alone make anything. Anyway Kev, your Warframe just needs some time. Like you." The Vauban went to tap Kevin's side but Emm gave a loud harrumph that sent him scurrying back to his workshop. Kevin winced as the Trinity turned her severe glare at him. "Go back to sleep." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 "Nanomachines son." I see what you did there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Satsaru Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 You could just ask for a basic account of what's happening at the moment. I'm having fun slogging through the 340 pages. A fair point. Would someone mind giving me a basic account of whats happening? As much as I'd like to, real life prevents me from being able to power through this much content, especially not one that frequently updates. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sayfog Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 (edited) so part 4 of my attempt at a fan fic When Sayfog had got to the docking bay of the station she found someone waiting there for her. It was her room mate upon seeing her with her hover cart. He just nodded and kept waiting for her silently she blushed beneath her helmet for being so slow. When so got to the Snub he held up her note about leaving and loving him "so leaving so soon he said, well then" he says while messing around with the note in his hands "Whelp, open your helmet" he said while doing the same with his helm " I guess... if this is my last chance *gulp*... I... I... love you." he said right before kissing her on her lips and with that they exchanged a few awkward words. When she left he left heartbroken while watching an equally heartbroken, and tearful Oberon behind. There last words were "well that was awkward" she said while he said "i'll also send a request" When she arrived at the dojo 4 days late because even new snubs aren't meant for such long trips it was largely deserted and the first person she saw there was a black and red nova who said "YAY ANOTHER NOVA HERE HAVE A COOKIE". So Sayfog took the cookie which promptly blew up in her face "(mmm... cherry)" she fought while the black and red nova told her "told her im guessing your Sayfog?(worst decision of the day as it turns out.) currentlyim the recruiting officer. and i say that... YOURE IN... youll be bunking with I don't know who you'll be bunking with" Sayfog sighed out in relief that she had been accepted she then asked "hey what's your name?" Oh she said "oh it's Nova-Quinn" thank said Sayfog Sooooo what do you guys think? Is Sayfog bunking with ancatha ok? Jeaheanne. Edited January 28, 2014 by Sayfog Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NyghttheClassy Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 (edited) Can try, but I'm likely to miss something. Let's see; (Recent Events) -Kris ended up in the Station's security force after coming to terms with his 'other side'. -Acantha got assaulted on the station by a red ash (Cain), and saved when her Djinn, Qarin, found and got help from Galen, a master assassin. -Kris and Acantha then met in the security station, talked a bit. Acantha decided Cain's punishment - stripped of gear and handed to Hues and -NovaQuinn in Aequitas under probation. So much Pain. -During all this, Nyght had woken and been released for a cell in Aequitas, filled in on current events by Akinos (?), and then claimed gear from foundry. -Some people in Dojo bumped into eachother/chatted etc. -Quinn, the foundry master, had gone to station for a bit, 'met' Kris, is on way back to dojo (I think). -Kris had run into a drunk Sophia at the station, after she (or Venefica?) had beaten some 'full of it' lad who had tried to pull her. Things got 'Cosy' in his apartment. -sometime later, Sophia is on a mission to kill Kril, is captured. Kril's scans/observations find she is pregnant. He refuses to harm her (my god, an honourable Grineer) -After she is gone too long, Kris calls on favours from Aequitas to launch a rescue mission. Initially asks just Acantha and Sophia's Brother, Kylar, but a bunch of others get roped in. Enter all the Tenno characters in the rescue line. -Tyl reagor has gone to Kril's base, wants to experiment on Sophia. Corpus also find out, launch assault to their own ends. -Rescue team has begun their assault, team 2 making as much chaos as they can, whilst team 1 goes for Sophia. -Impending big fights with bosses and major characters, we also have yet to get a Team 2 view. (which I'm slowly thinking about) -Team 1 = Kris, Kylar, Acantha, Aiden -Team 2 = Nyght, Ghost, Idrhen, Lycanos, Aktos (?), Vulkana (?) Do correct/add things I've missed/wronged. It's a lot of details in a compressed and stressed head. Also, Is it too lore bending for me to make a slightly custom ship blueprint? I'm thinking something Sleeker/ more fighter like than the snub, at the cost of less space. And I swear I'll try and make it look moderately Tenno/Orokin. (remember I had Nyght come from a slightly Unique/different clan before collapse. Odds are there were more than JUST Snubs) Will try and upload scans if/when done. Edited January 28, 2014 by NyghttheClassy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sayfog Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 IM FEELING LIKE WRATH NOW. GIMME SOME FEEDBACK!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pyjamalama Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 (edited) IM FEELING LIKE WRATH NOW. GIMME SOME FEEDBACK!!!!!!!! Sayfog, honestly... it's just 'meh' for me... but that's just because I have to have serious depth in my stuff or else I don't feel interested by it. Edited January 28, 2014 by Pyjamalama Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FatViking Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 IM FEELING LIKE WRATH NOW. GIMME SOME FEEDBACK!!!!!!!! Allright Say, you asked for feedback. Now I am not trying to be mean, so if I come off that way, tell me. First of all, You need to improve in the writing department. Your writing style goes over stuff in an extremely fast manner and does not allow us to take in that information in one reading, and therefore it won't be appealing to a lot of people. However, I do know that ADHD is not the best writing buddy, so I can kind of understand. I look forward to see you improve, but please, slow down. This isn't a race about who can write the fastest. Take your time and the stories will benefit. Those are my two cents. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sayfog Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Allright Say, you asked for feedback. Now I am not trying to be mean, so if I come off that way, tell me. First of all, You need to improve in the writing department. Your writing style goes over stuff in an extremely fast manner and does not allow us to take in that information in one reading, and therefore it won't be appealing to a lot of people. However, I do know that ADHD is not the best writing buddy, so I can kind of understand. I look forward to see you improve, but please, slow down. This isn't a race about who can write the fastest. Take your time and the stories will benefit. Those are my two cents. yeah I know what you mean but my inspiration just comes for five mins then just wham no inspiration at all Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FatViking Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Say, that happens with the best of us. that is what I was doing with Voidruler...which is also a reason for why I decided to retire that ''Story'' if I can even call it that. It was just chaos. If you get inspired so quickly, I suggest you write down the basic idea into something like a notepad. It really helps in the long run. +you will have a reliable source of ideas, other than your brain. How cool is that? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bejuizb Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 The trick is to let the idea stew in your head. I've given all my stories a good 5-6 hours of thought before typing out even the first draft. It's going to be tough, but you can give it a shot. Also, I'll be free in 5 hours from now!! YAY Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sayfog Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Thank you guys for all the good ideas (got one stewing right now). BTW:going to a new school tomorrow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bejuizb Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Good luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wrath_Of_Chrysalis Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 *insert cliche Good Luck phrase here* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EDeN153 Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Here's a small account of my guys. Two of them just escaped and captured a rogue half-infested Tenno who was going to use them to augment himself, they met another 'sentient-infested' that he had experimented on along the way, he came with them. Then when they got back, Alane, my female character, was reunited with her younger sister (Ty, Draik) and Stephen, an Excalibur is confronting and interrogating them in a way. Der. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bejuizb Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 A summary for Aiden: Aiden, a Rhino pilot (I consider Warframes to be like mechs :P) woke up in a derilict ship. He fought his way through hordes of enemies and met up with Jadoth, who woke up a few hours after AIden. Together they try to escape the ship, and encounter a small army of Grineer fighting a J1 class Golem called Arachnis (Lore bending imo; the infestation could manifest into a large variety of beings). Together they manage to kill the Golem and make their way to the shuttle bay. There, they meet Jrogar who gets stabbed by Aiden because of his apperance. He escorts them both out of the ship and then knocks them out, delivering them to the Aequitas dojo. I'm unsure of what happened to Jadoth, and consequentially my Burston Prime, but Aiden meets Acantha who guides him around the dojo, showing him to his Warframe and a new set of weapons. He joins Acantha in aiding Kris rescue Sophia because he feels that it is his duty to help a fellow Tenno. As of now, Aiden is cleaving his way through dozens of Grineer, and just took a shot from frog's insane Nekros. I'm waiting for someone from Team 2 to do their POV now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NyghttheClassy Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Unless someone else pipes up on Team 2, I'll have to start with Nyght's view. But I honestly don't feel confident moving others pieces around. Too scared of screwing characters portrayals up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Entari0 Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Recap for my characters Entari and Saichra are going from The Station to the dojo, and will arrive soon. Anyone who would like to write their arrival is welcome (I kind of don't want to, to be honest). Saur, an Excalibur, is deceased, and, as The Stalker mentioned in my second story, his death had something to do with Saichra. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Here are my characters Aktos: An Ash user, a pretty calm and level headed person, He and his companion VulCana are on the rescue mission. He is black with red energy lights and wears the Locust helmet. VulCana: A Valkyr, calm and somewhat posh in her speech and mannerisms. Hates being forced into situations without her consent, dangerous when angered (obviously). Around Aktos she's less posh in her speech. She's mainly a blood red and wears the default helmet. She's also on the rescue mission. Their back-story is in the works. I shall call it:*dramatic music* "Awakening" *more dramatic music* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bejuizb Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 I AM FREE!!!! Exams done for another 4 months!!! WOO!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 I AM FREE!!!! Exams done for another 4 months!!! WOO!!!! FREEDOM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 (edited) I've just challenged someone to explain how Valkyr is useless. This should be good. EDIT: Well, i'm surprised that he actually raised good points and was civilized about it. Bout time this happened. Edited January 28, 2014 by DraikoHunter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jeahanne Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 so part 4 of my attempt at a fan fic When Sayfog had got to the docking bay of the station she found someone waiting there for her. It was her room mate upon seeing her with her hover cart. He just nodded and kept waiting for her silently she blushed beneath her helmet for being so slow. When so got to the Snub he held up her note about leaving and loving him "so leaving so soon he said, well then" he says while messing around with the note in his hands "Whelp, open your helmet" he said while doing the same with his helm " I guess... if this is my last chance *gulp*... I... I... love you." he said right before kissing her on her lips and with that they exchanged a few awkward words. When she left he left heartbroken while watching an equally heartbroken, and tearful Oberon behind. There last words were "well that was awkward" she said while he said "i'll also send a request" When she arrived at the dojo 4 days late because even new snubs aren't meant for such long trips it was largely deserted and the first person she saw there was a black and red nova who said "YAY ANOTHER NOVA HERE HAVE A COOKIE". So Sayfog took the cookie which promptly blew up in her face "(mmm... cherry)" she fought while the black and red nova told her "told her im guessing your Sayfog?(worst decision of the day as it turns out.) currentlyim the recruiting officer. and i say that... YOURE IN... youll be bunking with ancatha once she gets back" Sayfog sighed out in relief that she had been accepted she then asked "hey what's your name?" Oh she said "oh it's Nova-Quinn" thank said Sayfog Sooooo what do you guys think? Is Sayfog bunking with ancatha ok? Jeaheanne. I PMed you about this. Sorry for the late reply about it. Next time, please wait on my answer before posting. Sorry and thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 I wonder why people think that any warframe that doesn't kill everything with it's ultimate is useless. It doesn't compute with gaming logic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jeahanne Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 God, how come I feel horribly guilty for sounding even semi-mean (at least in my own head) when commenting on anything someone else has posted? I don't mean to come off like a jerk... I'm sorry. *runs off to emo corner* IN OTHER NEWS! I have an idea for when Aiden gets shot at. Would anyone be averse to me writing something up about it? Or is it already being handled by someone else? Either way is alright ^-^ Thanks guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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