DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 (edited) I like these stories. Just what i needed after being kicked off the T.V. -_- And Spikey, Venefica getting Cain was highly disturbing. I was to disturbed to acknowledge my disturbance. >_> Still trying to write a POV for my characters. EDIT: Everyone, Vulcana's name is spelled V-u-l-C-a-n-a. With a C. It has been bothering me and i thought you would pick up on my hint in one of my posts. -_- Edited January 28, 2014 by DraikoHunter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Entari0 Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 I find it weird that we have characters with names like Heus, Saichra, Darius, etc etc etc, and then we have characters named John, Kevin and Stephen. It's funny how we think of such varied names. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bejuizb Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Yeah. I tend to give my characters a mix of generic and fantastic names. Keeps me entertained. But no matter what, I would call a bombard character Billy. Just say it aloud: BILLY THE BOMBARD What else will do that name justice? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 I find it weird that we have characters with names like Heus, Saichra, Darius, etc etc etc, and then we have characters named John, Kevin and Stephen. It's funny how we think of such varied names. I might introduce a character named Bob..........BOB! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Yeah. I tend to give my characters a mix of generic and fantastic names. Keeps me entertained. But no matter what, I would call a bombard character Billy. Just say it aloud: BILLY THE BOMBARD What else will do that name justice? Bob the Bombard? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spikey844 Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Bombard Ben? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ajkrumen Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Bombard Billybob y'all Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wrath_Of_Chrysalis Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 We have Goliath the Bombard EDeN the Ph'glui Bob/Billy the Bombard That one Lancer who died Jrogar the Gyroog That other Lancer who died That Lancer who bled out And then we have Tzeentch the EverChanging. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Entari0 Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 We have Goliath the Bombard EDeN the Ph'glui Bob/Billy the Bombard That one Lancer who died Jrogar the Gyroog That other Lancer who died That Lancer who bled out And then we have Tzeentch the EverChanging. You made me laugh. Have a pie. *HANDS wrath a pie and immediately runs for cover* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 We have Goliath the Bombard EDeN the Ph'glui Bob/Billy the Bombard That one Lancer who died Jrogar the Gyroog That other Lancer who died That Lancer who bled out That Lancer whose chest was torn open And then we have Tzeentch the EverChanging. We can't forget him Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varkest Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Is everyone allowed to post in here?:O I'm german though... my english is not that good but I'm a really big fan of all of you =) And I'm a greenhorn. A brown fluffy unicorn with an greenhorn. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ajkrumen Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Everyone's allowed to post stories in here as long as they adhere to the new rules stated by Aiglo a couple pages back. I'll dig around for the link :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jeahanne Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Sure, everyone is welcome ^-^ One of us, one of us, one of us... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bejuizb Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Of course! Go right ahead Chee. And don't worry about English. We all understand. Just do what you feel like! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varkest Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 (edited) Well okay :) any criticism is appreciated :D I first wrote the background story of my character ^___^ Will do a second part if this one is good :Dgot goosebumb's right now..------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Sound’s of gunshot’s, siren’s of alert-system’s crying, running people, dying people. My vision was blurry, I was barely able to see anything. I heard a lot of strange languages, noises which I didn’t care to hear before. Komm her! Schnell! Wir müssen hier weg bevor die Erde explodiert! German huh? So they were trapped here too... Come on! We have to take her to the shelter or her baby’s going to die!, shouted a man while carrying a woman which had tears in her eyes. I heard other languages too… but my ears seemed to have stopped working. I chuckled. Well it’s not like I’m a machine. Maybe I can’t hear a thing because of the sharp object in my head. A Kunai? Ah… right. I’m laying in front of my dad’s Dojo. The only one active since the old, old times. I recall the past. I went through a lot of training since I was two years old. It was a harsh time, but It made me strong. I found friend’s, had a girlfriend, had a lovely family. But that doesn’t matter now. I got taken back to reality as a man accidentally run over my broken feet. Well it’s not like it bother’s me anymore, can’t feel my whole leg’s anyway. Is that how it will end? I’m barely 16 now… I still could have such a long life. Its nearly December now… that would mark the last month of the year, the last day of humanity, the last breath of my life. It’s sunny, no cloud’s. I think I’m ready to part. I chuckled again and managed to pull out a smile. The life is an ironic joke. I gave everything I had to the human’s beside me, but all I got back is betrayal and an Kunai on my forehead. The one who threw it was no one other as my father. As I started thinking of him, a small tear ran down my cheeks. I took my last breath, and closed my eyes.I woke up. Blinded by a big white and cold gleaming light. What the hell? Is this heaven? If yes I feel kinda stiffy. I looked at my surrounding’s and immediately, a cold wave ran down my spine. What I saw was not very appealing. I saw a lot of… Zombie-like thingy’s in containers with red fluid. And also a hell lot of saw’s, driller’s and other tools which are unknown to me. Suddenly a head popped of from behind and hovered above mine. What the F--- I Immediately punched out of reflex. It connected. Ouch? The mysterious stranger said. Oh great. I travel back time to save someone who could be my great-great-great-great-great-great-great- I don’t know how much-great grandpa and the first thing I get is a Ninja-uppercut into the face. I even fixed you’re body and enhanced it! Damn my nose is bleeding you stay here. Ah I will blend in your personal details. I opened my mouth ready to say something but then my Jaw dropped as I saw the detail’s written on an hovering, transparent, screen. Holy crap. All ribs broken, ear drum imploded, hole in the forehead, both leg’s crushed, one arm missing, one eye missing, jaw dislocated, brain damaged, spine cracked and the last one said : Wax sealed Blueprint found in jacket. I closed my mouth and looked around for my jacket. It was nowhere to be found. I wore an patient’s robe with a lot of wires strapped to my vessels. Now that I looked closer at myself I saw that everything in my body has been fixed. And I felt a lot of power inside of me. The mysterious man came back in.You better now? See I didn’t lie I fixed you up quite good. He laughed. Even if it took me a whole week to structure your muscle’s, how much did you train dude? Ah, sry, grandpa. You should feel a lot better, I also installed two little arc-reactor’s left and right inside your lungs. Sorry couldn’t bring your lungs back though. I think an animal ate your lungs. I looked at him. He looked at me. He coughed.Well okay I’m no good at jokes so please bear with me. Ah, we will arrive in a while so please sit back and I will start up you internal reactor systems. I leaned back without saying a word. Eager to await what would happen next. I shoved my questions aside for the moment. Even while feeling better, I still feel worn out. As if I just died yesterday. My eyes opened wide again as I heard a humming sound inside my chest. I felt how even more power ran through my whole body. Well you’re ready. Behold you’re new body! He started laughing like a maniac.My eyes started acting up weird. They calibrated themselves, going from X-ray to life marking sight, I can feel how machine gears are turning. Try standing up he said. I tried and it worked. Well I didn’t even felt the massive graphene chain’s breaking which should have restrained me. Oh hoooo *whistle* look at you! Now put on these clothes and we’re ready to dock on the capital space city to meet the Lotus. No questions! It will all be clear to you when we arrive. And you will also receive a “warframe” it’s still in beta-testing though. And I don’t know it the suit will accept you internal systems. But we will see. He giggles. I put on the clothes he gave me. Those clothes were the thing’s I wore when I died. But in modern style. I looked at him and shook his hand with a smile. Thank you for everything. I mean it.He smiled back. Thank me later. Grow stronger. And don’t disappoint me.I stepped out of the ship as the green light flashed above the door. The first step in an new life. I saw a huge gate where the word’s : Welcome to the Orokin Capital City.Just as I stepped through the gate. I heard an female, mysterious, calm voice inside my head. Welcome Chee, last survivor of Earth from Dimension 55. I welcome you to the Orokin Capital. Find me, and receive enlightment. Edited January 28, 2014 by Chee Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varkest Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 I just now saw a lot of mistakes. please bear with me :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Wow......that was pretty good dude. Ninja uppercut, XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DraikoHunter Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 I just now saw a lot of mistakes. please bear with me :D It's all right. We understand your English isn't good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varkest Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Thanks :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Entari0 Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 *whispers from shadows in gradually increasing volume* one of us one of us one of us Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jeahanne Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Good story. I don't think it follows game cannon, but I still liked it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Varkest Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 :O thank's guys. It means a lot to me =) thinking of doing the first mission of my char next. Maybe now or tomorrow... kinda tired.I'm already thinking of Unicorn's which eat's butterfly's and poops rainbows..I don't know if it's bad for my health to think about such things xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MandoKarla Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 (edited) Great stories, peoples. Edited February 20, 2014 by MandoKarla Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wrath_Of_Chrysalis Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 One of your toys, O Lord TZEENTCH! NEVER FORGET THE T! HORRORS, FIND HIM! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bejuizb Posted January 28, 2014 Share Posted January 28, 2014 Aiden will be involved in a last stand scenario against Kril, Goliath, and 48 other marines. This should be fun to write :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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